1              When the fragrance of sweet osmanthus fills the space between the land and the sky, when the liquor brims with the aroma of chrysanthemum, and when inserted cornels cover the top of hills and mountains, there it comes——the most masculine festival——Double Ninth Festival.                     

BY英文05级6班李鼎夏

点评： 巧用排比，气势磅礴

2               With high cheek and thin lips, she is an acquaintance of mine, and shi is so good at facing off that a master of Sichuan Opera will be too ashamed to be in front of her.

                                     BY英文05级6班黄燕妮

点评： 运用夸张手法，新鲜感十足

3               I became fired with a great passion for watching TV.

                                      By 英文05级16班阮祁

点评：句中become fired with a great passion for doing sth. 生动形象地表达了作者渴望的心情。

4               Mr Bingley is still sitting in his comfortable chair at home, which is unusual, because at this time of day he is supposed to be in his office, working hard with his colleagues.

                                   By 英文05级17班吴文静

点评：此句将定语从句，原因状语从句以及分词结构巧妙地融合在一起，既能流畅地表词达意，又使得句子的结构紧凑严密。

5   Years in, and years out. Life was always on her way.

By 英文05级20班邓倩萍

点评：year in and year out 表一年又一年地过去；life用on the way来表示其持续行进的状态，将生活形象化。

6   Many people have wild fancies, but only few of them translate thoughts into reality.

By 英文05级17班李君渝

点评：这里wild fancies用得好，充分地表达出激情洋溢的程度；并且活用动词translate，使得整个句子变得生动有力。

7   Chinese have a deep affection for the moon especially in the old times.

BY英文05级13班黄淼淼

点评：在用多了love,like这类简单的词汇之后，同学们可以多花点工夫象这位同学一样想想英语里同一意思的不同表达，不要想着学到一种表达就满足了，have a deep affection for sth， 对某物有很深的感情，道出了中国人对月亮的喜爱之情。