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My First Experience of Watching a Fashion Show
[ 作者:广东外语外贸大学 04级 余小悦    转贴自:本站原创    点击数:356    更新时间:2009-5-30    文章录入:jiangtiehai ]

 

Jennifer and I finally climbed on the steps leading to the MFG building. Grasping the invitation in hand, my heart beat uncontrollably, like Cinderella stepping into the castle. As an enthusiast of fashion design, it was my first time to attend such a formal professional fashion show.

It was a paradise after stepping the last step of the stairs. Three main architectures with a gazebo walled a small but comfortable patio, which a T-shaped platform stated in the middle, surrounded by fresh clovers, looking rather like a piece of green drapery. Pop Stars were being interviewed by crowds of media beyond the platform.

Skies turned pale and everything was shrouded in a curtain of darkness with bright lights flashing like diamonds sparkling the night. Looked through those huge French windows, the pure white in walls compared the dull black out walls distinctively, forming pieces of comparative art works.

Hosts and guests were freely drinking, eating and chatting.

Not being one of the celebrities, I and Jennifer, two sophomore students, had been wandering about for a long time, wondering what to do. I was too nervous to talk to other guests, because I knew no one among them. The question of “who was who” blended in my brain continuously. I just took out my camera, and shot pictures of everything, from a dog to a crowd of people’s heads. However, people’s friendliness relaxed me a bit. Whenever I was about to take a picture of someone, they would be very nice and gave me a beautiful smile and pose.

Finally, Jennifer put down the dessert plate and said to me, “We should do something.”

I nodded but followed her suspiciously. She popped here and there, took pictures of different people, showed admiration to them and then chatted with them. Sometimes she even played little tricks on them, such as taking off someone’s caps and sunglasses, touching one’s beards mischievously. Standing beside her with a mouth wide, I was surprised and really appreciated her energy. I started to blame myself of being diffident. Inspired by her, I began to chat with others, but I got stuck when chatting with a very good-looking Londoner, maybe the most attractive foreigner I’ve ever met. However, my nervousness relieved a lot when I coincidentally met a schoolmate, who was one of the models running the show.

After a cocktail party, which made me nervous all the time, we took the last bus heading for the runway show. We arrived at the place a little bit late so that the show had already begun for a while. We hurried to find a place where we could get a good view of the show, despite how starved we were.

Groups of models walked gracefully on the runway, with the phantasmagoric music and glittering lights. We were all stunned by piece after piece of splendid clothes performed by elegant models.

When a piece of romantic French song switched on, models with innocently white voile skirts walked upwards. As the song was soft and slow, models changed their confidentally fast paces into elegant and slow ones.

“Look,” said Jennifer excitedly,” they walked barefoot!” I turned my attention from the exquisite dresses to their feet. “Yes.” I screamed,

“How thoughtful the designer was. That’s why the models walked as if they were roaming on the heaven, like angles, fairies, whatever names you addressed to. They walked on their toes, pretending to walk in high heel shoes, roaming, dancing, I might describe, like ballerinas. Their adorable gown floated as gentle as slight mist. I was totally obsessed with the perfect harmony of these clothes, performing and music.

As the models disappeared, music and lights shifted to brisk ones. Another group of models dressed in fluorescent summer wears appeared. Girls in short pants and skirts while boys in shirts with button unclosed showing healthy, sexy and charming looks held the audience spellbound.

Excited, intrigued, and intoxicated, I could do nothing but indulge myself in continuously shooting pictures of the ornate clothes. This fashion show, in its overwhelming way, marked the very beginning of my dream of becoming a fashion designer. But the more important thing is, more nights like this in the future would help me to stack my cache of fashion design, until one day I find my own work is displayed on the T-stage in front of me.

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        本文构思清晰缜密,采用由远及近式来呈现第一次看时装秀的经历。第一段介绍了作者对时装秀的热恋,初步展示了第一次看时装秀的心情;第二段简洁地展现了现场布局;第三段运用修辞等手法描写了当时的天气等自然场景,如比喻“……bright lights flashing like diamonds sparkling……”;在描写了自然场景后,作者用一句话简捷地描写了主宾的活动,之后转入对自己第一次参加时装秀前的“cocktail party”和观看时装秀的一系列心理活动的描写刻画。所有的这一切都服务于最后一段话,就是作者梦想成为一个优秀的“fashion designer”。
    本文的一大特色是描写细腻,例如“……finally climbed on the steps……”体现出对时装秀期待已久的心情;“……a paradise after stepping the last step……”这一描写使作者能够看时装秀的快乐幸福之情溢于言表;用一连串的动作将朋友Jennifer在“cocktail party”上的表现淋漓尽致地展现在读者面前,“……popped here and there, took pictures……, showed admiration to them and then chatted with them. ……played little tricks……, ……taking off someone’s caps……, touching one’s beards…….”。
    但是感觉本文用词有些繁琐,以至产生病句,例如这一句“Looked through those huge French windows, the pure white in walls compared the dull black out walls distinctively,”建议改成“The pure white in the studio formed a sharp contrast to the dull black outside”,这样可能会更地道简练一些。
                                        (硕士生兼职助教 常春娥)


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