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Dogs over Cats
[ 作者:广东外语外贸大学 06级 邵凌子    转贴自:本站原创    点击数:573    更新时间:2009-6-4    文章录入:jiangtiehai ]

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  My grandparents lived with us since I was young. During the long period of time, they have raised two cats and five dogs. Each of them was very familiar to me. As I always fed them and played with them in my spare time, I found out the different characteristics between cats and dogs. From my experience, I saw that indoor dogs made better pets than indoor cats because of several reasons.

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  Firstly, dogs can forge a closer relationship with human beings than cats do. For instance, our dogs were always ready to be touched, held or kissed; every families can play with them. But for cats, things were different. The first cat we had at home always roared at us, even when we were giving food to him. Besides, that black cat never allowed me to touch him, every time I wanted to caress him; he just bowed his back and bellowed at me. Sometimes it even scratched me. For people who want to keep a pet as a company, dog is a better choice than cat.

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  Secondly, dogs can protect their masters from dangers, which cats will never do. zhaosf Dogs’ hearing and olfaction are very sharp. They can perceive dangers immediately. When something is wrong, they bark to warn people. When their masters are controlled, the dogs will help them by using their teeth. But when masters are in danger, it is always the cat to be the first one run away. So, dogs give you a secure feeling when you live alone or when you have kids or elder people at home. It is something you can’t receive from cats.

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  Finally, dogs are more faithful than cats. When a dog set its mind on complying with one master, it’s hard to change it, no matter the master is rich or poor. But cats do not have the sense of faith at all. Everyone can be their master so long as they give them delicious food. I have always heard stories about dogs that traveled thousands of miles to go back to their former master’s home after been sent or sold to others, but I’ve never heard a cat did such a thing.

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  Indoor dogs make better pets than indoor cats because they are friendly, security and faithful. When you want to keep a good friend, a guider, or a relative-like company at home, choose a dog, and you will find your life more easy and happy.

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  • 会员『ellieyuan』于2010-4-1 23:11:46发表评论:
  • 评分:3分
        这篇文章属于中下的水平。
    文中错误比较多,如: ¨of the most asked question¨,¨`more easy and happy,it is always the cat,after been, guider(should be guard),my grandparents lived with since I was young,because they are friendly, security,(could be helpful),and faithful.
    词汇量也比较有限。
    不过,文中的逻辑比较清楚。这点我觉得很好,因为在很多外教看中国学生的作文时,最关心的就是逻辑到底是不是很清楚。但是大多部分中国学生,包括我自己在内,都更加注重复杂的句式,丰富的词汇量,和高深内容。
    这篇文章在这方面就很值得我们学习。

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